Biweekly Essay Help - Week of January 31, 2021 (1st Edition)

Hi everyone!

It's time for our biweekly essay help thread! Due to the high volume of comments on these threads, we will have two threads each week. This thread will be sticked until Wednesday morning when a new thread will take over.

Please use this thread to request feedback on your essays, including your personal statement, work/activities descriptions, most meaningful activity essays, and secondary application essays. All other posts requesting essay feedback will be removed.

Before asking for help writing an application essay, please read through our "Essays" wiki page which covers both the personal statement and secondary application essays. It also includes links to previous posts/guides that have been helpful to users in the past.

Additionally, please join the"Essays" chatroom to discuss essay writing with fellow pre-meds and give/receive feedback on your essays. To view /r/premed's chatrooms on desktop, scroll down to the "Chat rooms" widget on our sidebar. On mobile, click on the "Rooms" tab.

Please be respectful in giving and receiving feedback, and remember to take all feedback with a grain of salt. Whether someone is applying this cycle or has already been admitted in a previous cycle does not inherently make them a better writer or more suited to provide feedback than another person. If you are a current or previous medical student who has served on a med school's admissions committee, please make that clear when you are offering to provide feedback to current applicants.

Good luck!